Critique my craigslist add please

[edsaws]

Ok this is my 1st craigslist add tell me what you think. http://newlondon.craigslist.org/hss/2343348817.html Residential & Commercial Services we provide include: Mowing (includes mow, String trim & blow off all hard surfaces) Mulch installs Hedge & Shrub trimming Spring & Fall Clean ups Power Washing for a Free Estimate Call Ed Thank you We look forward to servicing your lawn care needs. Keywords: Lawn care, cutting, trimming, mulching, weedeating, mowing, fertilizing, compost, green, pasture, debris, organizing, removal, tree, grass, plants, flowers, lawn, quality, landscaping, land, scaping, lawn maintenance, edging, weed-eating, clean-up, garage Oh Happy Easter

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[shadrach]

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I would used "trim & edge" instead of "weed whack" maybe zip codes as keywords at bottom of ad (not all search by city) would put whatever service you are trying to push the most in the title (Lagasse Lawn Care & "service") . email address wouldn't hurt either. The logo in the ad is a nice touch that will set you apart

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[cruzgardening]

Originally Posted by edsaws

Ok this is my 1st craigslist add tell me what you think.
http://newlondon.craigslist.org/hss/2343348817.html

Oh Happy Easter

Add more Keywords!!! and zip codes yes this is the most important part of it all if not how would people find you on Google?

[Steve]

What about using an eye catching headline and also use it in the title?

Title: Would you like your lawn cut for FREE?

Top line of ad: Get Your Lawn Cut For Free!!!!*

Then at bottom: * Get your yard cut once for free, with an annual lawn care agreement.

[edsaws]

Ok heres my newest add I deleted the one in 1st post
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[Steve]

Can you try attaching the image again? Your previous post image looks like it has been deleted.

[edsaws]

Lets see if this works heres a link http://newlondon.craigslist.org/biz/2345462842.html

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[Steve]

I think you got something there. Now experiment with this design along with possibly another and see which brings you in more calls. When you find one that brings in the most calls, then experiment with that one and try changing one element on it to compare with the original and see again which brings in more calls.

Does this help?

[edsaws]

Thanks Steve, that makes a lot of sense. How long do you think I should give any one design before making some changes? I also have this add running on www.backpage.com another free site to post an adds.

[Steve]

You could run two ads at the same time and then see which ad is pulling in more calls, based on the special the flyer promotes and asks you about on the phone. After testing it for a bit, pull the one that gets the least amount of calls and replace it with a variation of the one that is getting the most calls.

Keep us posted on what you find.